First of all, we're terribly sorry for the ridiculous wait and thank you for your patience. There's just a couple of things we wanted to get to before finishing up processing your app!
As you mentioned, your preincarnation personality reads more like a history section than really summing up Homura's personality, and is unclear what is and isn't headcanon in places. Because of this, we'd like to ask for - not a complete revision - but at least a more in-depth summary of her personality, as well as italicizing or otherwise pointing out what isn't cold hard canon fact elsewhere in the personality and history sections.
Also, just for clarifications sake, with the network sample, it is meant to take place at some point after she's had an Echo to explain her bomb expertise, right?
Also-also, as a side note, we'd like to forewarn you that because of how her time resetting power works (and because of how the game works), it's unlikely she'll ever be able to regain that particular ability. Just so you know ahead of time. :)
(LATE) Revision Request
As you mentioned, your preincarnation personality reads more like a history section than really summing up Homura's personality, and is unclear what is and isn't headcanon in places. Because of this, we'd like to ask for - not a complete revision - but at least a more in-depth summary of her personality, as well as italicizing or otherwise pointing out what isn't cold hard canon fact elsewhere in the personality and history sections.
Also, just for clarifications sake, with the network sample, it is meant to take place at some point after she's had an Echo to explain her bomb expertise, right?
Also-also, as a side note, we'd like to forewarn you that because of how her time resetting power works (and because of how the game works), it's unlikely she'll ever be able to regain that particular ability. Just so you know ahead of time. :)