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Save the Earth Mods ([personal profile] theearth) wrote 2013-09-18 09:31 pm (UTC)

REVISION REQUEST

Thank you for your interest in Save the Earth!

Before we finalize approval of your app, however, we'd like to request a couple areas of expansion, firstly in Alexa's reincarnated history section - her relationship with her father appears to have been her most significant one as she grew up, but there is no mention of her mother, and for strength we'd like to see just a bit more detail on how Alexa might have been influenced by factors in her growing-up.

Secondly, the experience of bullying alone may not be quite enough to trigger a first Echo and we'd prefer devising of an alternative or "strengthened" one - for example, if she had had perhaps cousins who'd bullied her to bring the connection to bullying specifically by Rider's sisters closer, or if an instance of bullying had included something very closely resembling something that Rider's sisters had done or said, that'd do the trick.

With both of these handled, you'll be good to go!

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