Before we formalize our verdict, however, we'd like to request the following: - a grammatical run through your app, most particularly to catch consistency of tenses within sections. - an expansion on Eliot's personality. (ex. Why has he chosen to abstain from red meat?) - an alteration to his timeline. If he was born in 1961 and proposed after finishing medical school, either in or before 1984, that would make him 23 years old or younger at the time of finishing his graduate. That's unlikely. You may want to refer to the American Medical Association on the requirements for becoming a physician to help you recalculate his timeline. - confirmation that the players of the characters tied to Eliot's background are on the same page in regards to their involvement.
As an additional note, we noticed you referred to Elion as going to the East Coast for university. Locke City is in the East Coast.
Thank you for patience! We look forward to your revisions.
REVISION REQUEST
Before we formalize our verdict, however, we'd like to request the following:
- a grammatical run through your app, most particularly to catch consistency of tenses within sections.
- an expansion on Eliot's personality. (ex. Why has he chosen to abstain from red meat?)
- an alteration to his timeline. If he was born in 1961 and proposed after finishing medical school, either in or before 1984, that would make him 23 years old or younger at the time of finishing his graduate. That's unlikely. You may want to refer to the American Medical Association on the requirements for becoming a physician to help you recalculate his timeline.
- confirmation that the players of the characters tied to Eliot's background are on the same page in regards to their involvement.
As an additional note, we noticed you referred to Elion as going to the East Coast for university. Locke City is in the East Coast.
Thank you for patience! We look forward to your revisions.