Before we pass formal approval, however, we'd like to ask for a couple of revisions!
First, the third-person sample is a tad brief - might we ask for an alternative or expanded one to allow for a bit more of a personal look into Edgeworth's personality and/or thought process?
Secondly - and this is a more minor one! - you mention Edgeworth's love of the Steel Samurai, but not what it suggests about him, especially in contrast to his usual decided lack of frivolity!
REVISION REQUEST
Before we pass formal approval, however, we'd like to ask for a couple of revisions!
First, the third-person sample is a tad brief - might we ask for an alternative or expanded one to allow for a bit more of a personal look into Edgeworth's personality and/or thought process?
Secondly - and this is a more minor one! - you mention Edgeworth's love of the Steel Samurai, but not what it suggests about him, especially in contrast to his usual decided lack of frivolity!